Here's a poem I wrote back in 2006. Feel free to critique it, just enjoy it, hate it, whatever seems to fit your mood today.
Sometimes We Just Need to be Reminded
Sometimes we just need to be reminded.
Sometimes we just need to stop the train,
get off, and look
at the sunflowers alongside the tracks.
Sometimes we just need to breathe. Deeply. In.
Out. Abdomen soft.
Sometimes we just need to feel the chair under
our backside.
Sometimes we just need to look at our partner,
really see him or her again.
Sometimes we just need to be reminded.
-- Mike Banys, 2006
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I'm curious, was there a place along the tracks with sunflowers that inspired this poem? Or did that thought come into play after the poem was already taking shape?
I really like the second to last line, about really seeing your partner again. It's so easy to see people in labels or past emotional caricatures, that we forget who they really are, what really drives them, and how to connect with them.
The poem's overall theme was autobiographical. However, details such as the sunflower were completely fictional. I've never even been on a train that had flowers next to it (i.e. not elevated or underground).
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